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let me tell you about kisses and catnaps
and the creases of your eyes when you smile.
about fairytales and how none of this is fair to me.

let me tell you about everything i have lost
and the promises i knew i could never keep.
about your lips and how i thought, 'this is it for me.'

i miss 4 am and i miss the moonlight holding us.
i miss you sleeping 5 minutes until forever
and i miss you, simply because i miss you.

i miss falling stars and i miss my arms around you.
i miss the parts of me you used to love
and i miss you, simply because i miss you.

i miss knowing i could always make you smile
and i miss knowing you could always do the same.
 
but mostly, i just miss you.
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i miss you like the stars.


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~Solarune May 15, 2011   Writer
I love how this begins with "let me tell you" and then moves on to "i miss", almost as if it's a change in tone/emotion. The imagery at the beginning is lovely, and the simplicity of the language later on makes it all the more profound. :)
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~poemFB May 15, 2011   Writer
I wrote this as two poems originally, then had the 'i miss you' segments between the 'let me tell you' segments. finally, decided on this mess. I appreciate it :]
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~Solarune Jun 7, 2011   Writer
Ah, I see. You're welcome! :)
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~ItaliaEmo May 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow.. Really strikes a chord within me. Reminds me of many of the feelings that I used to have whilst heartbroken; when I commonly wrote poems with similar subjects to this one. I very much enjoyed it-- keep writing. (:

Also, aside from the lack of capitalization (which I acknowledge may be intentional), the word "though" in the last line of stanza 2 should be probably be "thought" and the quotations that follow go from ' to ". Hope that helps a tad. d:
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~poemFB May 2, 2011   Writer
fixed, thank you very much :) I appreciate you taking the time to not only read it but analyze it. It means a lot to me!
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~ItaliaEmo May 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're quite welcome! (: Always happy to lend my mind to the use of another. ^^
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:iconkallia-goldenwings:
that is jujst so beautiful
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~poemFB May 2, 2011   Writer
thank you very much :]
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